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Great pacing and action in the scene. You can feel the disruption as the events unfold around Ella. Only confusion is around how she knows - we know she is supernatural, but is this a feeling, a dream, some case of influencing events (knowingly or unknowingly)?

This is one crazy school....

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Laureldale High has some serious problems. I’m glad you’re already wondering how Ella sees things. I’m so excited for you to know more!

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Who is the sketch of? Jason?

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Yep! I wanted him to have that statue of a young hero look. Just a little too chiseled a face like one might expect of someone named after a Greek myth.

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It’s a great sketch!

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I can really feel the effect of paragraph structure you mentioned in one of the Chapter 1 podcasts. Reading this chapter feel anxious, rushed, choppy... in all the right ways. I had never really paid attention to how paragraph structure immersed me in the story before.

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Oh yay! I'm so glad you noticed!

I spend a lot of time staring at paragraph shape and structure, and it always feel so wonderful when everything lines up to create the right feel for the scene.

Thank you so much for joining me on this adventure!

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